Crust:
- Try to find a video specific to the crust. I recommend checking out braingenie on Youtube.
- You spelled primarily wrong.
- Include pictures of what gabbro, diabase, and balsalt look like.
- You spelled dense wrong.
- Try to find more info the internet since you only have three points.
Mantle:
- Try to find a specific picture.
- Try to find a specific video.
- I don't think silicate is your own words.
- Try to to find more info from your notes. there was a lot.
Outer Core:
- Try to find a specific video.
- After the word first on your first sentence put a comma.
- There is much more info that you can easily find.
Inner Core:
- Try to find a video that includes relevant video to the voice-over.
- Remember, don't start sentences with because.
- Include info like how hot the inner core is, and how thick the inner core is.
Overall it's very well done.
:)
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Superduperman12
12/18/2011 06:00:01 am
Thanks for the feedback Joe
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