Rock Cycle:
- You can probably combine the second and first point.
- Put periods at the end of each step.
- On 8 you forgot to capitalize the first word.
- You didn't capitalize the first word on you second sentence at the bottom.
- You have a grammatical error on the the first sentence on the bottom.
- Your second sentence is really long, try to shorten it.
Rock Cycle (Chemical Weathering):
- The second sentence doesn't make any sense.
- On your fifth line down you have a grammatical error.
- You spelled usually wrong.
- If your gonna do point form remember to add the points.
Rock Cycle (Mechanical Weathering):
- On the end of the first line you could say "are". As in "The three causes of mechanical weathering are".
- On you last point you made a grammatical error on the word build.
- If your doing point form ad the points.
The Theory of Plate Tectonics:
- When you said plate like sections put a "-" in between plate and like.
- I don't believe that distinct masses is your own words.
- I don't think that ridiculed is your own words either.
- Add more info about Alfred Wegener to teach the viewer more.
- You spelled Eurasian wrong.
- Have all of the plates down listed in a straight line, not a broken one.
Overall good work!
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Superduperman12
12/18/2011 06:01:09 am
Thanks for the feedback Joe
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