Please e-mail 3 or 4 of your friends and ask them to give you feedback for all of your sections.
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Superduperman12
12/15/2011 09:24:37 am
ok, thank you
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Hermonie
12/15/2011 10:40:28 am
6 Characteristics
-Maybe instead of just saying <In this section I will be talking about the 6 characteristics of rocks and minerals.> you should list them.
CHRYSTAL STRUCTURE
-I can see a few spelling mistakes.
-Maybe give a little more info
-This is up to you but i think it would look better in paragraph form.
HARDNESS
-You should add some more info you barely have any
-What you have written in the last line here <made a hardness scale showing the different hardness level from 1-10.> you should have Harnesses not just Hardness the second one not the first in this Sentence.
-maybe explain more about the Mohs scale like what its called? and what is hardest 1 or 10?
LUSTRE
-you need way more info you have 3 lines.
-and explain more about lustre not just <Lustre shows if a mineral is metallic or non metalic.
If a mineral is shiny it is known to have metallic.
If a mineral is not shiny it is known to be non metallic.> all your saying is Metallic = Shiny...
COLOUR
-you have a good amount of info maybe add a little more.
-good information
STREAK
-good info, maybe add more
Cleavage and fracture
-I found a spelling mistake go through it and fix the mistake.
you have a good site maybe just add some more info but you have good images.
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Mr. Hong
12/15/2011 02:00:41 pm
Please remove the facebook/twitter icons.
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Ammit the Devourer
12/16/2011 07:32:20 am
6 Characteristics:
-You should put everything on 1 page; it would de-clutter your website
Crystal Structure:
-Don’t press return every sentence, unless it’s a new paragraph or a bullet
-You did a great job putting everything in your own words!
Hardness:
-Maybe you should put an image of Mohs’ Hardness Scale
-Don’t press return every sentence, unless it’s a new paragraph or a bullet
-Get rid of the boarder around your image, it would look cleaner with-out it
Lustre:
-Don’t press return every sentence, unless it’s a new paragraph or a bullet
-Re-fraise the second, third, fourth, and fifth sentence, they’ve got some grammatical issues
Colour:
-Don’t press return every sentence, unless it’s a new paragraph or a bullet
-Get rid of the boarder around your image, it would look cleaner with-out it
-On the fifth sentence, get rid of, ‘it’
-In the sixth and seventh sentence, use a comma after titanium, and chromium
Streak:
-Don’t press return every sentence, unless it’s a new paragraph or a bullet
-Get rid of the boarder around your image, it would look cleaner with-out it
-Maybe, after pyrite you should out, ‘(fools gold)’ so it would be clearer
Cleavage and Fracture:
-Don’t press return every sentence, unless it’s a new paragraph or a bullet
-Get rid of the boarder around your image, it would look cleaner with-out it
-I liked the simile you used for mica. It was very good!
Overall, I thought you did a great job! You put everything in your own words and your website is very clean, and professional! Keep up the good work!
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Superduperman12
12/17/2011 04:09:03 am
thank you for the feedback
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Joe Joltz
12/18/2011 04:52:06 am
Crystal Structure:
- Include a picture of the 6 different systems.
- The third point doesn't make much sense. Try to make it more clear.
Hardness:
- Add Mohs scale.
- Put periods on the end of your final two points.
- Re word the first sentence.
- Fix your grammar on the second sentence.
Lustre:
- The second point is incorrect info. It doesn't mean it has metallic inside of it. Check over your notes.
- You can combine the second and third point.
- Include pictures of the difference between a metallic mineral and a non-metallic one.
Colour:
- You spelled corundum wrong.
- Don't put the number 2. Instead write the word.
- You spelled sapphire wrong.
Streak:
- Include pictures of the difference between gold and pyrite.
- Other than that this page is very well done.
Cleavage and Fracture:
- Include pictures of the difference between quartz and mica.
- Your last sentence sounds almost like your repeating yourself. Try to re-word it.
Good Job!
:)
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Superduperman12
12/18/2011 05:59:31 am
Thank you for the fedback Joe
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